You come over and talk to me
Something in your smile
Tells me that it aint sincere
Behind that smile you hide.
That look in your eye I have seen before
Tells me that you don't care
You say I just dont get it
And there is nothing I can say
Behind those eyes you lie.
I have tried too many times to come close
But all you did was push me away
You said you did not mean to
Is there something here to believe
Or is it just another part of the game you're playing?
I have believed in you many times
I swear I am not going there again
I have seen that wall around you
And I dont think I can do this again
Behind that wall you hide.
You walk around with no care in the world
Take people for granted
You say you dont need no one
You think they want to hurt you
Behind that pretense you hide.
10 comments:
It is not possible to write anything even close to this without going through exactly what its meant to say.
Secondly, to go thru it and then be able to actually express it this way ... u have a skill that you should not waste girl. And the only thing I can say is that I hope to never put anyone in a position to write something like this abt me. Thats how much it meant. Love ya.
Hmm I'll present my views on pretty much all your work. Of all the verses posted here, I liked "you were there" and "empty soul" Besides that I have consistantly had a problem with the structure of the verse. Sometimes it's too simple and lacks the lyrical quality that the two I mentioned do possess. And overall, all of them are super mush and as I said earlier I'm biased.
Dissecting the latest one more closely, The verse is more of a narrative than a piece of poetry plus I feel it lacks the lyrical quality.
Well that's that. I hope I did not offend with my banter. Please understand it's a strictly personal opinion. Others may appreciate what I have failed to. But kudos and keep writing.
yeah the stuff written is ver real ..
Hey - Just as we discussed yesterday nite, its easier to write on things that we go thru in our life. But thinking of it, to go thru something like this is not an easy task. I second Mr.Dumbsanes views.
So finally u did manage to write something :-))))
Nams, I am only able to relate with the stuff you write. Somehow, i feel everybody has gone through this phase at some point in time !
Few simple words, carry depth of intense meanings !
Impressed !
That sounds creepily similar to a complaint I had to hear! How lucky that she couldn't write thus and blog.
Did you read the thing I said about girls not being expressive?
Wow that was gr8...i fully agree with dumbsane on
"without going through exactly what its meant to say"
and
"u have a skill that you should not waste girl"
Gaurav
seems it ws written for me...
now i wont say great post or something like that, simply because i know wat it is to write and post it and then be commented...
all i wud say is, keep writing dear lady, cause u touch hearts :)
no u dont know me, but if u continue to be in touch... who knows :)
and to undrstnd dat comment cmpltly, u'll have to know me properly...
thanks for visiting my blog.
all u'll have to do is find delhidreams on google mail :)
i left orkut some time back...
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