Wednesday, July 12, 2006

Home Alone.! - My first attempt at story writing..!

The clock struck 3:00 AM , and I woke up with a start as I heard a noise. I sat on my bed straining my ears and listening .. there it was again.It was really faint and I could not make out what it was. My heart skipped a beat and I felt goosebumps. My folks had left for Bangalore that evening and I was home alone and the thought of someone in the house scared the hell out of me. I sat there on the bed paralyzed wondering what to do next.. part of me wanted to go and investigate and part of me just wanted to crawl under the covers and shut my eyes tight. I decided I wasn't going to be a coward and told myself its probably just a mouse and that my imagination was going haywire.I got off the bed and as I did the bed creaked.

"Damn...!! Shut up you dumb thing " I mumbled under my breath.

I slowly tiptoed towards the door. There was a baseball bat against the wall near the door, which belonged to my brother.I picked it up for defence..just incase the mouse decides to pounce on me.! I slowly opened the door and peeked out. It was dark and quiet.. everything seemed normal. I almost heaved a sigh of relief and decided to turn back and get into bed .. when I heard that noise again.. this time a little louder and continuous. It came from my parent's bedroom and sounded like someone singing .My heart was beating so hard I thought I would just faint.Slowly walking towards my parents bedroom I quietly opened the door and stepped inside, baseball bat ready to pound anyone who dared attack me at that moment, and then I heard it loud and clear ..

"Believe me, baby,
I didn't plan it this way
I thought I'd see you one night and
Forget you the next day "


My heart stopped beating as the music played..I stood there paralyzed.. thoughts rushing through my head...
"Where is this coming from...there is no one home except for me.. how could this be happening ??..... should I go in and check or not .. oh God.. what do I do ?? "

Reluctantly I took a step inside and reached out for the light switch on the panel and turned on the light... the music continued to play. The music system was placed on the far end of the room in a corner. I scanned the room and there was no one there.I walked towards the bed which was in the middle of the room and took up most of the space and slowly bent over and peeked under it. Again, no sign of anyone there.

" Strange" .. I thought to myself.

I got up and walked towards the music system to turn it off. As I reached for the button, I noticed that the deck was empty with no tape inside..

"what the heck..!? " I thought, "how the hell is that song playing then? "

The system was old and the CD player had not been working for months and mum wasn't too keen on fixing it either. So that option was ruled out. I quickly switched off the main power and pulled out the plug and the music stopped. As I turned around to go back to my room...I froze..!!

There stood my mum near the door staring at me angrily and then she said " You're going to miss your bus again..! " and then I could feel myself shaking...

I woke up with a start .. and stared at my mum bending over me, waking me up.. I looked around and saw that I was lying on my bed and then it struck me...that it was all just a dream...!!

And I heard mum saying on her way out... " kab sudheregi yeh ladki.. saari raath music system on rakhti hai .. uff..!! "

8 comments:

Reshmi Iyer said...

:)

DuMbSaNE said...
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DuMbSaNE said...

Good work for a first attempt. Surprised me with the ending. More tension next time. Lets have a real murder.

Sundar said...

kab sudheregi ye ladki....true indeed...lol....going by your poems..guess u shud be out with a very interesting Love Story ;-)

Anonymous said...

Heyy Nam gud one,although i thot it would end on a romantic note.. but nice..:)

Anonymous said...

While reading it , i did kind of get involved..but as the others have mentioned the end did not realy live up to the mystery it had build up.I personaly wud luv to c u attempt the same story with a diff ending. But this was very neat for a first attempt.

Ratish Mani said...

Fantastic stuff ! True that dream can be totally different in different ways, there are so many spurts of thoughts and you wish you remembered how it went from there and what happened next !

Many people get to live those fantacy lives / be that fantasy character / sometimes it happens the way they want it to, othertimes it's totally crazy - they are probably a victim of Tsunami doing relief work in Vietnam !

That's what dreams are all about :) Good work. Am looking out for more !

Anonymous said...

the build up upto the end was really good ...but the end gives it away ...
Gaurav